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Melanie Bettinelli's avatar

The wordplay in the first stanza feels very Dylan Thomas: exuberant and full of the joy of language.

Edgar Ballantyne's avatar

Why thank you :) I’m a great fan of Under Milk Wood so that’s quite a compliment.

Ann Collins's avatar

Your poem is felt in all the water molecules of this human body, where it diffuses out like steam into all the empty space between those molecules. I would not change one word, Edgar.